Writing 201: Poetry–Through a Fog of Tears

Day Five: Fog, Elegy, Metaphor

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I knew when you were gone it would be hard to see you again –

ever in that same way.

I cried when you made the choice to leave.

I let you go like silken strands slipping from my waiting arms

blowing in a heavy breeze.

I felt your presence leave as my heart tried so hard to cleave.

I knew our time was past, our days were gone.  We were through.

I sighed and let the memories of you flow like a gentle rain

through a fog of tears and forever pain.

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I am not sure that I understand the elegiac couplets, so this is my humble offering instead.

Thank you all for your encouragement and inspiration!

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About Colleen M. Chesebro

Colleen M. Chesebro is an American Novelist & Poet who loves writing paranormal fantasy and magical realism, cross-genre fiction, syllabic poetry, and creative nonfiction. She loves all things magical which may mean that she could be experiencing her second childhood—or not. That part of her life hasn’t been fully decided yet. A few years ago, a mystical experience led her to renew her passion for writing and storytelling. These days she resides in the fantasy realm of the Faery Writer where she writes the magical poetry and stories that the fairy nymphs whisper to her in her dreams. Colleen won the “Little and Laugh” Flash Fiction Contest sponsored by the Carrot Ranch Literary Community on November 2017, and in 2018, she won first place for the “Twisted Travel” category. Colleen lives in Arizona with her husband. When she is not writing, Colleen enjoys spending time with her husband. She also loves gardening, reading, and crocheting old-fashioned doilies into works of art. Learn more about Colleen on colleenchesebro.com.
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35 Comments

  1. Nicely done Colleen. It’s quite Shakespearean in a ‘Parting is such sweet sorrow’ way.
    xxx Huge Hugs xxx

  2. OH this is good, but sad!

  3. Lovely and sad elegy. Well written. <3

  4. I love your poem. Hope your are having a wonderful weekend.

  5. Lovely! I haven’t finished mine. Actually I don’t fully understand about the elegiac couplet, it’s a bit difficult.

  6. Very moving piece. We have all had to let someone go. Thanks for the sweet reminder. Van

  7. Beautiful, full of feeling but quite visual too.

  8. Beautifully bittersweet. 🙂

  9. Colleen, you have no idea how much this touches me.

  10. This is nicely penned… you’ve used the metaphors very effectively… 🙂

  11. Lovely. I love poetry I just wish I was better at writing poems. A poet is a very rare and splendid artist.

  12. From my little understanding, this fits an elegy ;). Beautiful written, i felt the emotions even with the metaphors. 🙂

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