I’ve found an amazing group of poets at Carrot Ranch.com where every third Monday of the month, I host the Double Ennead Challenge as a guest at the Saddle Up Saloon.
Follow the link to the challenge…
What’s a double ennead? The Double Ennead comprises five lines with a syllable count of 6/5/11/6/5, (33 SYLLABLES per stanza) 3 STANZAS EACH = 99 SYLLABLES, NO MORE, NO LESS! Punctuation and rhyme schemes are optional and up to the poet.
This month, I asked the poets to take their double ennead through the TUFF challenge like we do for the Carrot Ranch Rodeo. I illustrated how to take your double ennead from 99 syllables to 48 syllables, to 24 syllables to finally, a haiku (12 syllable poem).
I want to commend these poets for taking this challenge on! Bravo! I love the concept of the TUFF challenge because it shows writers how important the brevity of words and their meanings can be. There is an enormous amount of word-craft in poems that can create feeling and beauty in a modicum of lines, and getting your poem to that point is an immense challenge. The progression in the following poems tells the entire story.
Here are the poems from the June 21st challenge:
Mulberry Tree, Summer Fruit she doesn’t always bloom what natural hitch makes her appear dead one year, alive the next I discovered that she needs her he to fruit another quirk is her berries ripen odd not all at the same time, when shadows vanish from the morning, I’ll pick – bis, in the evening the best gift is from you – I boil the berries, sugar, lemon juice attempting to make jam after washing them and removing the stems 48// 4, 7, 6 trio she does need him the mulberry tree, to bloom her sweet purple berries nature often works in pairs; male and female to procreate, fruit ever fickle is the process of living I measure my time 24// 6, 6, 6, 6 she had blossoms this year flowers transformed to fruit which I collected, brewed, gifted; sweetening life 12 (3 lines; short, long, short) mulberries, sweet from my tree, purple love my en’jam’bment © JulesPaige
Outside My Window, #DoubleEnnead Double ennead form, 99 syllables clouds like spun sugar in periwinkle sky, a tree’s outline in shadow in sunny grass, white butterflies flying above rose bushes. golden yellow lilies peeking out among all of the green foliage in the garden, red Japanese maple branches wave gently. a little brown sparrow hops about in grass, then flutters over to perch on the fence, these are the sights I see outside my window. 48 syllables, 4-7-5 stanza trio spun sugar clouds in a periwinkle sky, butterflies flying. yellow gold lilies among the green foliage, red maple branches, small brown sparrow flutters to perch on the fence, outside my window. 24 syllables, (6-6-6-6,) 1 stanza spun sugar clouds in periwinkle sky, butterflies and lilies, sights outside my window 12 syllable haiku, short-long-short spun sugar clouds above white butterflies and gold lilies. © Susan Joy Clark 2021
Garden Goddess trees, a summer haven green beneath branches birds and squirrels nest on limbs covered with leaves walking on hot pavement you are there waiting * branches covered in leaves help keep my house cool The shelter and shade provided is welcomed adoration is due garden space is yours * knarled and misshapen ancientness worn well trees hold a place of honor in the garden revered and respected great garden goddess 48 syllable poem – 4/7/5 stanza trio summer haven birds and squirrels nest on limbs you are there waiting * covered in leaves providing shelter and shade garden space is yours * ancient, well worn trees hold a place of honor great garden goddess 24 syllable poem – 6/6/6/6 only one stanza ancient summer haven covered in leaves of green giving shady shelter homes for birds and squirrels the garden space is yours– honored garden goddess 12 syllable haiku (short-long-short) ancient cypress emanating solace– goddess ©️Ruth Klein aka RuthScribbles
SHAFT OF HOPE a warm hued shaft dazzles on azure expanse luminescent sheen in an idyllic trance blazing through dark waters in a rippled mirth haloed trail to heaven in a dark chiasm leading to faraway stars mysterious dispelling deep darkness shading life profound fading embers burnish bright to light dark lives life’s shadowy shroud basks in fiery lustre incandescent hope flows into dark niches For the 48 syllable poem a 4-8-4 stanza trio: warm hued shaft falls on dark waters in shiny trance a rippled blaze haloed trail leads way to stars far mysterious on a dark night fading embers of life’s shady shroud burnish bright hope flows unbound For the 24 (6-6-6-6) syllables and only one stanza: bright trance on dark waters haloed trail to stars far life’s fading embers glow luminous hope abounds Finally, 12 syllable haiku (short-long-short): bright beam glows on life’s dark fading embers hope shines © theIndieShe
Centring – (Six Sentence Story #168) Tense muscles, sweating palms A racing heart beat? Symptoms of stress related anxiety Stoking dubiety In your competence. Choose instead to focus On the energy. It flows with vigorous ardor through your form Creating the firestorm That you are feeling. Breathe slow and deep to draw Out the excitement. Berth it fast in the centre of gravity Your pelvic cavity … The concept of Ki. © Laura McHarrie
Many thanks again to everyone who participated in this challenge. Writing poetry makes us better writers!